Today in the Life Writers Vlog, we look at Bite #165, called “Tighten Up,” from my book, Eating an Elephant: Write Your Life One Bite at a Time.
Extra, unnecessary words can weigh down our sentences, even when we don’t notice they’re there.
We can easily get into the habit of using phrases such as due to the fact that, at the present time, or in the near future. Sometimes, we think those words make our sentences sound more important. They don’t. They only weigh them down.
In this vlog, I give you three questions to ask as you go through your stories, sentence by sentence, making sure every word earns its place.
Do you naturally keep your sentences tight and clean, or do you have a process for eliminating excess words? Tell us about it in the comments section below.
But whether your sentences are loose and saggy or tight and clean, always remember, the only way to do this wrong is to not do it at all!
Until next time, happy writing, everybody.

Wordiness is my besetting sin! Every time I go back over my work I find unnecessary phrases. I’ve learned to watch for “as” and “as if” because they often herald areas I need to cut. I have a soft spot for ornate writing but I’m rubbish at it. I have to keep reminding myself to write shorter, cleaner, and simpler.
Most of my long sentence sins are due to using a passive voice. I dont write tight or try to in the first draft.
Hi guys. Thanks for the reminder Patricia. I’m with Etya. I always tighten up my work and read it several times. It’s my nature. My yard looks the same way. Neat and clean. Not so much inside. Love Kit’s rationale! ❤️
Patricia, you made my day. I am so happy to see you smiling and looking good and healthy. Tightening sentences are so important. I go over my work a few times before I submit, in addition to what you’ve said, many if us are guilty of overusing these words, quickly, softly, etc. in writing. Years ago, i thought these words enlightened my story, but not anymore. Thanks for this episode.
Hi Patricia, Thanks for reminding me of this. Long ago Ms. Word let me know I overused the word “much”. So many of my sentences with much here and much there and much everywhere. I had no idea. Now, much is not a word in my vocabulary, but I do need to start checking again for those unnecessary words. Hope you continue on the mend. Best of everything to you, Connie.
Hi Connie. Your post made me laugh because my husband always makes fun of me for saying” thank you so much.” He says “why do you say “so much? It’s annoying. Just say thank you!”
I tell him it’s because it’s an extra-special thank you! Lol.
Hi Kit, That makes me feel so much better! Lol.