Pick any page of Suleika Jaouad’s book, Between Two Kingdoms, and find multiple examples of great writing you can emulate.
Today, we’ll focus on two devices she uses–physically describing herself and her conscious and deliberate use of you.
I give you an exercise at the end of the video. Please post your response to it the comments section below.
After weeks of practice we finally stepped out onto the auditorium stage under the show lights behind the curtain. My hair was in perfect braids but I frowned at the scratchy ruffled skirt and collar of the dress my mom sewed for me. But when I glanced across at my classmates, three rows of us in matching green socks and shiny black patent shoes, a proud smile moved across to my lips. The teacher reminded us loudly to “Look Up”! Heat flushed my already painted cheeks as the thick velvet curtain rose no longer dampening the sound of the piano.… Read more »
I can see the whole thin, Kit. Nice descriptions. I especially love the last two sentences. How true!
Here it is… Then: It was my first high school prom. After what seemed like hours in the beauty shop, my hair was styled in a high, backcombed ‘do. The dress was one of Mom’s beautiful creations, a sleeveless, empire- styled gown with a scoop neck lined bodice fashioned of white eyelet. Attached to the bodice was a sweeping, floor-length skirt of frothy light lime green. A yellow baby rose wrist corsage over elbow- length white gloves completed my ensemble. And now: It’s finally a beautiful, cool, clear morning, perfect for gardening. Dressed in my tee shirt and jeans, garden… Read more »
Fun comparison, Linda. Good detail, easy to see.
Love it, Linda!