What can Rock Star Writers earn?
All qualifying Rock Star Writers earn a ticket to a group coaching session with Patricia. During this ninety-minute event, Patricia and other Rock Stars focus on three randomly selected Rock Star Writer stories in a live review and feedback session. That’s right–three lucky participants have the opportunity for their work to be reviewed, highlighting what works in the story and what could be improved. What writer doesn’t want practical feedback to refine their work?
Attached is my Rock Star story for review. Picture is quite large, don’t seem to be able to make it smaller,
Attached is my story for the Rock Star Writers review. This is the first story that I submitted. I received constructive feedback from my fellow writers, and I have amended my story and added a conclusion.
I like how you created a tranquil mood with your word painting of the trees, Lorna. Nice work.
Lorna.
Even though I gave you my review two weeks ago, I still love the picture you painted.
With your Brooklyn accent, I would love to hear you read it.
John
Here is my submission for Rockstar Writers, titled Rainbows to Blues. A short story about becoming military.
Lisa Marie,
Once again, you paint a great picture, put us right into the action, the feeling. Great job!
Thank you Linda.
I’ve said it before, I love the way you write, the way you think. This is a gem of a piece. It has heart, cadence, color and fresh expressions. You have some memorable phrases (piling off the bus at o-dark-thirty) and strings of vibrant verbs. You’re a master of “show, don’t tell”. Great job, Lisa Marie.
Thank you very much, Cathy.
LM,
I just got goose bumps reading this story. I went through BMTS in November 1966. I don’t know when you went to Lackland, but you just wrote the first chapter in my USAF biography. The only thing that you didn’t mention was crying. I think that every member of my flight (including me) cried at least once.
I hated it while it was going on. But at the end, I looked back at how much I grew up during those eight weeks.
John
I hear you, John. It was an experience . Now hurry up and write your book so I can say I’m published…at least a first chapter.
My Rock Star Story
Cathy,
A beautiful expansion of the earlier story you shared with your writing buddies. Your story is impactful. It continues the suspense, and the awkwardness of your new setting, with just enough humor to establish an idea that you will be able to handle this summer camp. I particularly enjoyed your naming of the characters of the camp: “Mr. Personality,” “The Lizard,” and “The Hoop.”
Cathy, that sounds like some experience. Such an unusual welcome. Did it get better?
Thank for reading it, Lisa Marie. Yes, in several ways it did get better. For example, it increased my acceptance of uncertainty and strange people; I learned to roll with whatever happened and to look for the positives. Happily, not everyone was bizarre. That summer was the beginning of my education, not the end of it. It’s why I write.
Catherine,
That was hilarious (maybe not to you, but it was to me). Great descriptions, Loved the lizard reference.
And Carl your bunky, “you don’t have to take care of him.” But did Carl snore?
John
In retrospect it’s humorous. Carl didn’t snore but he wet the bed every morning just before I got to him, so I had to clean him up and change his sheets daily. Four days later somebody else claimed him. I felt sorry for the poor little guy when I wasn’t feeling sorry for myself. My head got twisted 180 degrees during that summer, much of which I’ve forgotten. I’m glad you found it funny. I love to entertain.
Here’s my Rock Star story
Here is my story for consideration for Rock Star Writers.
Fun ride, Sheila! I was right there with you only more frightened because I hate roller coasters of all stripes. I could feel the alarm at the heart your story. That’s good writing.
My story for the Rock Star Writers feedback
Oh, Dar, what a wonderful surprise. I could see Miss Phillips with the blue streaks so clearly. You set up an interesting and colorful scene with all kinds of surprises. I liked the foreshadowing, too, and the train. Nice job.
Attached is my story for the Rock Star Writers event.
Wow, Millie, you had me all hunched up and tense. I’m so glad you got us home without incident! You wrote some good images and sound pictures into this one: It was followed by the dull tink-tink-tink of the salt flying from the back of the truck and onto my car. Having grown up in northern Michigan I really got into this story.
I’m submitting this story because of its importance to me. I need to conquer my demons.
John, your story with your vivid descriptions and remark left me breathless, exhausted and that smell still lingering in my nostrils. No wonder you are an all night writer. How do you ever get those sights, smells and sounds out of your mind. Gosh your stories get better and better.
Gallows humor aside, that was a horrific scene. Thanks for sparing us the details. There’s a similar one in my history which I didn’t personally witness but I knew the ones who died and their families. It would have torn me apart to see what you and other first responders had to confront. Kudos for your handling of this one.
Talk about taking the reader on an experience. That was quite the horrid occurrence. You wrote it well and as the reader, I got it.
John,
Thanks for sharing a story of such depth. Well told. Thanks for providing this important service to humanity at its finest and its worst. Vern