Part Five – “Places” Pages 105-123

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Welcome to part five of this six-part session where we’re writing six related micro-memoirs.

Post the fifth segment of your micro-memoir collage in the comments section below.

Once you’ve done that, read some of your fellow members’ stories and leave them a note of encouragement.

On August 27, 2024, we’ll use the following discussion question to talk about pages 105-123, which include chapters “On Some Stranger’s Bed” through “Sacred”:

Discussion Question: Titles of stories serve many purposes, primarily to capture the reader’s attention and tell something about the content. I find Jennifer Lang’s titles fascinating. Pick of couple of titles from the stories we’ve read so far in the book and tell us what about each title intrigued you, what the title did for the story, and what you believe was Lang’s purpose in writing it.

Read through these pages a couple of times, if possible, and prepare to actively discuss this week’s topic.

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Nancy Archibald
1 year ago

The fifth micro memoir is about hockey in a small town.

David Godin
1 year ago

A great story of a triumph and a lasting public service.

Barbara Rawls
1 year ago

Here is my fifth micro-memoir of my continuing story.

David Godin
1 year ago
Reply to  Barbara Rawls

I liked your use of the list format. The ordinariness of each bullet point gives the last, the line about the abuse, more punch.

Dar Lamb
1 year ago

Week Five – Micro Memoirs – Theme – Loss using poetry???

David Godin
1 year ago
Reply to  Dar Lamb

I like the poem format and am glad you were able to meet with your son.

Lorna Deane
1 year ago
Reply to  Dar Lamb

Beautifully expressed Dar, The depth of your love and wisdom shine through, and are profound.

Barbara Rawls
1 year ago
Reply to  Dar Lamb

Your poetry grips my soul; so happy you had that moment. I hope there were more such meetings.

Judy
1 year ago
Reply to  Dar Lamb

Oh Dar, what an emotional story. I can’t imagine how powerful that meeting was. Beautifully done, Dar.

Judy
1 year ago

My fifth week story.

Barbara Rawls
1 year ago
Reply to  Judy

Judy, I can’t see your story.

Judy
1 year ago
Reply to  Barbara Rawls

Barb, my story is down further, called “An Unexpected Date”

Kit Dwyer
1 year ago

My week five micro experiment – staying in present tense.

David Godin
1 year ago
Reply to  Kit Dwyer

Very well done Kit. I liked this line best. “How many places are like this in my brain? “

Barbara Rawls
1 year ago
Reply to  Kit Dwyer

Your thoughts show you the way forward. Well done.

Etya Krichmar
1 year ago
Reply to  Patricia

It is mutual, Patricia. I dislike Carl. Glad you survived the ordeal.

David Godin
1 year ago
Reply to  Patricia

The whole story in dialog, interweaving your physical and emotional pain.
I agree with Judy. I’m not a fan of Carl either.

Judy
1 year ago
Reply to  Patricia

I don’t like Carl.

Kit Dwyer
1 year ago
Reply to  Patricia

I like how you lead us through the time period in this painful scene, from person to person who is engaging with you. You show us pain is both physical and emotional.

Barbara Rawls
1 year ago
Reply to  Patricia

Oh, your painful foot. I cringe thinking of the agony you experienced. I look forward to continued reading of your story.

Dar Lamb
1 year ago
Reply to  Patricia

Hope someday to read the whole story. I’m intriqued. Sorry for this pain you suffered. Your descriptions give me pain so you do a good job. Ouch, taking off that boot!

Linda Peterson
1 year ago

Number 5

Lorna Deane
1 year ago
Reply to  Linda Peterson

Thanks for opening a window of what life on the farm was like for you in the 1970s. Busy sounds like an understatement. Now we can say, you survived it all, and thrived I am sure.

Judy
1 year ago
Reply to  Linda Peterson

You are right Linda, the seventies were indeed eventful. I hope things got better for you later on.

Kit Dwyer
1 year ago
Reply to  Linda Peterson

I like how you teach us farm lingo as you move the story along one powerful bullet at a time. Like Lang, in the short chapters of Places We Left Behind, you share your emotions well.

Barbara Rawls
1 year ago
Reply to  Linda Peterson

You certainly had a lot to contend. I feel your pain and frustration. Well written, Linda.

Dar Lamb
1 year ago
Reply to  Linda Peterson

that is surely not a time in your life that you would want to repeat. A stalking mother in law and a drinking husband. Good for you surviving all this….

David Godin
1 year ago
Reply to  Linda Peterson

I liked your bullet points. A lot of competing pluses and minuses

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Etya Krichmar
1 year ago

Part Five of Animals in My Life. @250 words. I forgot to attach a picture.

Lorna Deane
1 year ago
Reply to  Etya Krichmar

Heart warming story of Maple and Willow. You poured so much into their lives. The story shows a lot about you and your capacity to love and care for your pets. Bravo.

Judy
1 year ago
Reply to  Etya Krichmar

How adorable they are. Pets like that are a gift. They are forever a part of our hearts.

Dar Lamb
1 year ago
Reply to  Etya Krichmar

Happy Birthday Willow…Love the photo. Thanks for sharing this piece telling us of your love for your fur family

Barbara Rawls
1 year ago
Reply to  Etya Krichmar

This is a very sweet story, Etya. Such handsome puppies.

David Godin
1 year ago
Reply to  Etya Krichmar

Great use of the list, using bullet points for each dog’s disposition and the accommodations you made to bring them into your life.

Etya Krichmar
1 year ago

Part Five of Animals in My Life. 250 words

Lorna Deane
1 year ago
Etya Krichmar
1 year ago
Reply to  Lorna Deane

Yes, Lorna, sometimes we hear voices to avoid disasters.

Lorna Deane
1 year ago
Reply to  Etya Krichmar

Thank you Etya. Learning to listen and to take action is important.

JOHN ROCHE
1 year ago
Reply to  Lorna Deane

Rasta Jon sez, “Good vibes, woman.”
Loved the insertion of “The Voice.”
I understand the 300-word predicament. But if you have the room, the Governor needs to be defined to us outsiders.

Lorna Deane
1 year ago
Reply to  JOHN ROCHE

Thanks for your comments, John. Much appreciated. The Governor is the Head of the Central Bank.Our equivalent to the Chair of the Federal Reserve Bank,

David Godin
1 year ago
Reply to  Lorna Deane

The repetition of the command to read the document works very well, adding suspense to the story.

Lorna Deane
1 year ago
Reply to  David Godin

Thanks for reviewing, David. Interesting observation.

David Godin
1 year ago

#5 of 6 completed. List form.

Judy
1 year ago
Reply to  David Godin

Very cleverly done, Dave. You know all the basics for safe travels.

Dar Lamb
1 year ago
Reply to  David Godin

Dave, I think you should give considerable thought to writing a daily humour article for a local newspaper. Really, I’m not kidding…Love your list, a great way to make your point.

Lorna Deane
1 year ago
Reply to  David Godin

Dave, The List Structure works well for your story. That it is served up with your usual dose of humour, makes it even more interesting.

Etya Krichmar
1 year ago
Reply to  David Godin

Dave, good use of list form. My husband can relate to it better than I am.

JOHN ROCHE
1 year ago
Reply to  David Godin

Dave, you said it all. But wait. I would have added Gorilla glue to point # 4. But then again, as we spoke the other day, I’ve only been on a motorcycle once in my life.

Hit ’em straight this weekend. Yeah right. I forgot the real reason for your outing. NEVER MIND.

Norma Beasley
1 year ago

Here is my story for Part 5. “Let’s Be Friends Forever.” 300 wds.

Lorna Deane
1 year ago
Reply to  Norma Beasley

Beautiful story of friendship Norma.. You both created wonderful memoriies.

JOHN ROCHE
1 year ago
Reply to  Norma Beasley

Norma,

By now you know I have music in my life. You dug out a golden oldie with this story.
1969 – Sonny Charlles and the Checkmates sang:
“Black Pearl, precious little girl. Let me put you up where you belong.
Black Pearl, pretty little girl. You’ve been in the background way too long.”

Thanx for this story Norma. As the song winds through my mind over and over again, I have tonight’s MI–method for insomnia.

J

David Godin
1 year ago
Reply to  Norma Beasley

A beautiful story to remember Pearl and your special friendship.

JOHN ROCHE
1 year ago

This morning’s submission is thanx to a melatonin breakdown about two hours ago. Ya gotta write some time.

Lorna Deane
1 year ago
Reply to  JOHN ROCHE

Great story, John. You captured the range of emotions very well. You stuck the story with the surprise ending, especially after the casual way in whiich you slipped in, ” I don’t think I ever lost to him.”

Etya Krichmar
1 year ago
Reply to  JOHN ROCHE

Ha, ha, ha, John, I almost believed this story did not have an asshole in it. You did not disappoint. General Walker.

David Godin
1 year ago
Reply to  JOHN ROCHE

When they said it was a 24/7 job we all assumed it was the mission. But no, you wear the rank 24/7. At the theatre, the commissary, the bowling alley… Even if you’re not in uniform.

THIERRY LAGARDE
1 year ago

Week Five Theme; Suicide(113 words). A topic pushing me towards my last entrenchments for week 6

Etya Krichmar
1 year ago

Others choose to laugh

As they pick up shattered glass

I love how you ended this poem. It is very profound and poignant,

JOHN ROCHE
1 year ago

Once again Thierry, you’ve tackled a very rough subject. The format gave me the feeling that I was sinking along with Youse. Good imagery.
J

David Godin
1 year ago

“As they pick up the shattered glass”

Great ending to the story. great imagery

Judy
1 year ago

Here is my part five story, animal encounters.

Etya Krichmar
1 year ago
Reply to  Judy

What a delightful story, Judy! It is funny that you and your best friend had the same name.

Judy
1 year ago
Reply to  Etya Krichmar

Thanks Etya, it means a lot to me when you like my stories.

David Godin
1 year ago
Reply to  Judy

What a funny story. You were “cowed” into silence. Well done.

Judy
1 year ago
Reply to  David Godin

Yes, we were, what a shock that was.

JOHN ROCHE
1 year ago
Reply to  Judy

Cute Jude.
BTW, the cow was raised in the back seat.

Judy
1 year ago
Reply to  JOHN ROCHE

I bet it took awhile for those two yokels to get that cow in that car.

THIERRY LAGARDE
1 year ago
Reply to  Judy

A perfect title for this piece. I could picture Judy and Judy curious and bursting. Reminds me of my encounter with a parked station wagon with Vermont plates. In the dead of the night, on the busy bars and clubs, ST-Lawrence Boulevard, downtown Montreal (1,75 million inhabitants). A haystack in the back with an adult goat waiting for her ride home, presumably!

Judy
1 year ago

I’d love to read that story, Thierry. Sounds fun.

Julie Folkerts
1 year ago
Reply to  Judy

Judy, I enjoyed your story. I agree with your question about how they got that cow in the station wagon. Cute story.

Judy
1 year ago
Reply to  Julie Folkerts

I know! I bet that would have been funny to watch.

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